What do you think of my preface for my book?

You have an interesting way with words, and initially, I grabbed onto your theme, but I feel, that something was lacking towards the latter stage....Did you have a particular direction...Was the shadow, supposed to be his friend or was it his fathers spirit that your are trying to portray, or maybe his own fabrication.......Anyway, because i felt there were so many possible avenues, you kind of lost me, but, i would love to see more from you....Let me know please !